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Post by pr on Jun 7, 2009 17:08:58 GMT -5
(HI!!! ok...i know i said i wasnt coming back, but....i'm to in love with this site to stay away U.U...and finally, I HAVE A STORY!! its basically a rewrite of a story on my DA writing account, so enjoy!hopefully i'll get in a update tonight...if i can tear myself away from sims 3 O.O) P.S (can i get help with a title, cant think of one...thats not corny )
Chapter 00
Daisy sat at the end of the table with the blanket wrapped around her shoulders. She gripped it tightly, her knuckles turning a chalky white. A man sat down next to her and set a cup of coffee in front of her. "Daisy right? Why don't you tell us what happened." he turned on the recorder and waited for her answer. "Is he ok? I swear if you people hurt him..." she said looking up. "That's not important at the moment little lady we have to know if-"
"I ask you a question, is he ok?" she said again. "I don't get paid enough for this, yes, he's fine, he's in the lab getting tests done."
"He's not hurt is he?"
"Why would you care kid? He kidnapped you and looking at those bruises, I say he did something."
She didn't say anything. "So, why don't you tell us from the beginning."
With a deep breath she began her story.
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 7, 2009 21:20:37 GMT -5
^^ Oh I remember this, I'm curious to see what the first chapter is~
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Post by Fang on Jun 7, 2009 21:32:14 GMT -5
o.o ooooooh!! okay...you got my curiosity perked!! XD Please, continue...:3
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Post by pr on Jun 8, 2009 2:11:44 GMT -5
((this chapter one is no more, please go down to the new chapter 1))
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 8, 2009 12:39:47 GMT -5
x3 Interesting. I'm curious about this older brother of hers...
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Post by Ronnie on Jun 8, 2009 13:37:40 GMT -5
This is pretty good~
Mmm..Purple hair and studded ears...sounds hawt LOL XD
Ooo..OOo...I paint and play the guitar [pretty badly though ^^; ]....but I don't sing...EVER -_-
If you need help with a title, I'd go through your playlist of song titles or something...that's where I get a lot of my titles...I would help, but I don't know what exactly your story is about yet ^^;
Anywho, keep up the good work ^^ *gives a thumbs up*
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Post by pr on Jun 8, 2009 18:54:35 GMT -5
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Post by pr on Jun 8, 2009 19:22:03 GMT -5
Ama: You'll just have to wait and see :3
Ronnie: Yes...he's VERY yummy *drools*
and thanks, I just might do that....if i can remember the password for my playlist hehe.... and THANKIE
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Post by natalie on Jun 8, 2009 20:36:39 GMT -5
Great update, I like how it shows there personailities!! Super Job!!
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Post by pr on Jun 28, 2009 0:08:34 GMT -5
((hi, i redid chapter one, cause the first was boring..in my opinion. and its suppose to go fast like cause the real story is after what chapter 00 is about Daisy changed to...i gave her a attitude... and guns, lots of guns XD))
Chapter 1
"Were lost..."
"Shut up Daisy!" the captain yelled steering the ship to the left. "It's Kate now! And I told you we shouldn't of taken that left in the Staric Galaxy...." she said propping her feet up on the dash board. "You know, this was your idea." he mumbled.
"Yea, and I told you to go straight and take a right. But nooo! You had to follow your 'manly' instincts and where are we? On some planet were we have never been on yet." she said standing up.
"Will both of you shut up? Man, you guys are worse than one of those lame couples on the not-very-funny comedy movies." Aaron said tossing Kate a beer and taking her seat.
"Aren't you a little young to be drinking?" asked the captain.
"Aren't you a little to old to be driving?" she plopped down on the old leather couch, cracked open the can and started to drink.
"It's not like I ever get buzzed anymore....stupid facility and there stupid medicines." she said after she guzzled down the can and threw it away.
"Let's see....were in the.....Staric Galaxy still....on a planet called....Temlia?" Aaron said watching the monitor close in on the area they were in. Kate made her way to the window and looked out. The ground below them was amazing. Trees, larger than the skyscrapers back home, sprouted down from the ground, the greeniest grass she had ever seen covered the ground. "Wow...it's so pretty down there." she mumbled to herself.
"Ok, let's land and take a look around, it's late." Said the captain. As the captain decended down to the ground, Kate loaded herself with large gun strapped to her back, 5 hand guns strapped to her arms, ankles and one on her shoulder. Around her waist was ammo and granades. "Why are you loading up.
"Never know whats out there, even the most beautiful of things can be deadly." she said tying up her frizzy neon orange hair with a hairbow.
The finally came to a bumpy landing, and with a whoosh, the door opened up to reveal a forest of grass.
"You know Da-I mean, Kate, your brother isn't going to like this." Aaron said strapping on his gun. Kate looked away. "Like I care what he thinks." she mumbled jumping out of the ship onto the dirt cover ground. She pushed the larger stalks of grass out of her way and looked around.
"Where are you going?" asked Aaron. "I'm going to look around. Be back soon." she said marching through the grass. -------------
"Hey guys look what I got!"
Aaron and the captain looked up to see Kate on top of a small rabbit. It's white fur pink and red from the blood.
"Um, Kate? Why do you have dead rabbit?" they asked. "I found it, already dead, so...its a free dinner." she said smiling. "God your a idiot...whatever killed that is gonna come looking for it." said the captain.
"Oh yea....I didn't think about that..." she said looking down at the rabbit. The bush rustled. "I think it's back for its dinner." she said jumping down and ready to attack what ever came out of the bush.
A very very large fox leapped from the bush. "Fire!"
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Kate hissed in pain as she wrapped the bandages around her arm.
"You ok Kate?" asked Aaron helping secure her broken arm. "Fine, it'll be healed in a day or two." she said picking up her gun. "You brought it upon your self, souldn't of stole it's dinner." said the captain.
"Yea yea yea." she said making her way to her tent. She threw down her gun and laid down on the sleeping bag. "Ugh." she was alseep before she even finished the ugh.
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"Wake up! We gotta go!" Kate sat straight up and looked around. "Wha-?"
"Come on, grab your gun and let's go!" the captain tossed her the large gun and hurried out of the tent. Kate threw the gun over her shoulder and hurried out as well.
"What's going on?" she said as she climbed in the ship. "There's larger than us creatures, I heard them talking as I was getting firewood, they call themselves human hunters. Last time I checked, we are humans." he said.
"Good job Surlock." she mumbled closing the door and pushing down the lock hatch.
"What ever happened to that cute little Daisy that hated when someone would tug on her braids?" asked the captain. "She died when I joined The Facility." Kate said as they took off.
"Look! It's a human ship!"
"Crap!" the captain shot off, throwing Kate off balance straight into the door. "Ow....wha...ah!" she grabbed the now opened hatch and hung of for dear life as she swung along with the door thousands of feet in the air. "Theres one! Get her!"
"Screw you!" she said pulling out her bad arm, pulling out a hand gun and began to shoot at them.
"Ah!" the first man covered his face with his arms. "Aaron! Can I have a little help?" she yelled. Her arm was tired and she beginning to slip. Swinging herself she was able to get a grip on the ship. With a sigh, she knew what she had to do.
"Kate, hurry take my hand." he said. "Nah, I'm gonna play hero and let go, mind giving this to Sam?" she said taking the locket off from around her neck and throwing it to Aaron. "Are you crazy woman?!" he yelled reaching for her.
"Look! If I let go, you guys can get away, get it, got it good." she said.
"What about you?" said Aaron. "I get to do what ever it is they want. Don't know if I'll die or something worse, just, please, tell Sam I love him and I'll miss him. Or...you could come back for me. Doesn't matter." she said.
"I seriously hope you know what your doing." said Aaron. "If I don't live, and you find my body, no black funeral, got it? Wear.....blue." she said giving a smirk. "Gotcha." he said. She slung the gun around her shoulder and let go.
"Good luck Daisy." Aaron mumbled shutting the door.
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Post by pr on Jun 28, 2009 0:53:56 GMT -5
Chapter 2
"Is she ready?"
"Yup, oh, here." the man dropped a small blue bag into the others palm. "What's this?" he asked.
"Every gun, bomb, and granade she had." "That's a lot. How's her arm doing?" he asked putting the bag in a box. "Better, though she's not happy about being dressed up. She really hates dresses Ben."
Ben sighed and pinched the bridge of his nose. "Emma asked for her to wear a dress...and we have one that hates dresses. Wonderful." he mumbled. --------
"This is worse than hell itself!" she held up the long white gown and threw it to the side. "I feel like I'm getting married. Yeesh, this is worse than Sam's wedding.." she said unlacing her combat boots. "And they took away all my guns." she said pouting.
As she took off the light blue vest, the giant door opened. "Great.." she mumbled as she let the vest drop.
"Hello dear, I just came in to ask a few questions." the man said sitting down in front of her. His brown hair was starting to gray and a pair of old glasses rested on the bridge of his nose. "Shoot." she said unbuttoning her pants and throwing them to the side.
"Um, do you want me to come back after your done."
"Its not like your gonna see anything." she said revealing her entire chest down to her thighs wrapped in bandages. "Facility rules for woman, one changing area." she said picking up the dress.
"Ok..first off, your name."
"Kate." she said slipping the white dress over her head. "Age?" "17." "Any, medical problems." "Grand mal." "Excuse me?" he asked lookng down at her. "It's a type of seizure." she said tying the dress. "Do they happen often?" he asked. "Some times, when I say catch me, you'll know." she said tying back her hair. "When was the first time when you experinced the seizure?" "I was 13, about the time I joined the facility." the memory was hard to remember, but it was there. "Any side effects?" "Temporary memory loss, unconsiousness, drooling, blah blah blah." "Ok, thats all for now." he said. "So, what am I suppose to do now?"
Before he could answer the door opened and a little girl skipped in, and a woman close behind her.
"Good evening Ben! Is she ready?" asked the woman. Her long black locks framed her face perfectly. Preal earrings and necklaces showed off her wealth. The little girl was a spilting images, but shorter.
"Your tell me madam." he said getting up. The womans eyes lit up when she saw Kate. "She is so darling! Just perfect! Thank you Ben! Now remember, be at the house in 2 hours, and bring this little angel with you!"
"Little angel my a-" "Of course miss!" Ben said laughing nervously. "See you then Bennie!" she said taking the little girls hand and walked out. Kate snickered. "Bennie?"
"She's my sister, the boss reframes me from calling our clients by there real names, only Mr. or Miss, or along that line." he said sighing.
"Ok, let's finish getting you ready." he said.
"Yay..."
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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 28, 2009 1:18:01 GMT -5
I don't understand one thing... She is capture or not??
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Post by pr on Jun 28, 2009 1:22:11 GMT -5
yes, but she hates to show defeat... and all those questions were basically a pet registration
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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 28, 2009 1:29:21 GMT -5
A pet?
>w<!!
I can't wait for read more!!
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Post by natalie on Jun 28, 2009 2:09:57 GMT -5
Oh, WoW, this sounds awesome!! I can hardly wait to read more!!
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Post by pr on Jun 29, 2009 2:32:12 GMT -5
Chapter 3
Kate opened the top of the box and looked out. She was alone, finally.
"I miss ya Sam." she said pulliing herself over the lip. Thankfully, she was able to get them to give her a short dress, and dress capri pants. "Don't trust a carrot head."
She looked down over the edge of the table for a way down. "Where's a cord when you need o-jackpot." The telephone cord was just across the table from here. Quickly, she ran across the table and tested out the wire. "Ok, now, just to use the balancing act."
The old wire swayed, nearly knocking her over. "Slowly." She was close enough to the curtain now. Suddenly, the door opened wide knocking her off the cord. "Holy crap!" she barely caught the cord.
"Ok kiddo, time to get going." Ben said shrugging on a coat and picking up the box. "What no insults?" he smirked at he box waiting. "Ok, fine, give me the silent treatment." he said leaving the room. "Wow...that was easy."
She let go of the cord and fell onto the old gray carpet. She landed with a soft but painful thud. "Ouch."
Giving the room a quick glance, she tried to run through the thick carpet. But, it didn't work out to well. She fell forward. "Runnings out, guess I'm walking." just after she said that the door opened again. "Ok kid, where did you go? We need to get going or my sister is going to ripe off my head." Ben said looking around.
Carefully, Kate made her way past him and tried to crawl under the door. "There you are." she felt the back of her dress being pulled at, taking her away from her freedom. "Dangit." she said trying to get out of his grasp. He set her back down in the box and sealed her off again.
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Devon slipped one a plain blue t-shirt and fixed his hair. "Yeesh, let us make a big deal of my birthday." he mumbled under his breath. "Devon! Come on, every one's here!" yelled his mother pounding on his bedroom door. "I coming!"
He fixed the dreaded shaggy bangs, and hurried out of his room. "Let's go, this is your 18th birthday, a very important day." Devon rolled his eye and took the stairs two at a time. "Happy birthday!" everyone down stairs chimed. Even uncle Ben was there which was nice since he rarely came around.
There was a table filled with gifts, but only one was just a plain cardboard box. "Ok can I high, can I go now?"
"No, not until you open the gifts." said his mother forcing him down. "And have a piece a cake, then you can go back to being moopy." she said ruffing his hair.
The entire time was opening his other gifts, his eyes kept traveling back to the cardboard box.
"Ok, this is the last one, its from all of us!" she said setting the cardboard box in front of him gently. "Can I just go now?" he asked. "Open it, your little sister and I picked the gift out speical for you." said his mother. He lifted the lid and raised an eyebrow. "It's empty, now can I go?" he asked. "Wha-what? Ben!" the woman turned around.
"Wow, she's sneaky..." Ben mumbled looking around the floor.
Devon began to stand up. "No, you sit back down." said his mother looking around the room. She examined the box. "Theres a hole in it!" ----------------
"God he's a idiot." Kate laid on the passenger seat of the car looking at the roof. She fell out of the box (on accident) and he had left her. "This is getting boring."
She sat up and looked out the window. "Wonder when they'll come looking for me...Aaron better not forget, I swear I'll kick him to the next universe if he does." she mumbled. The car down opened wide. "There you are, how did you get out?" Ben said huffing. "I fell out of the bottom." she said. He quickly scooped her up and headed back in the house.
"Did you find her?" asked a woman.
"Yes, she was still in the car." he said setting her back in a box. "Ok, show time! Devon here you g-where did he go..."
"Ow!" "Open it now." The lid came off and Kate looked up. "Oh wow..."
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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 29, 2009 3:04:01 GMT -5
ó0ò!!!!
Poor girl!! T^T...
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Post by pr on Jun 29, 2009 14:02:03 GMT -5
((i am sooo original <---sarcasm and this is how a grand mal happens, my aunt has it, its pretty scary O.o))
Chapter 4
Devon glanced into the box, blinked, closed it and got up. "I'm done." he said shoving his hands in his pocket and starting walking up the stairs. "Devon!"
"Mom, thanks for trying, but I don't play with dolls..." he said turning around.
"She's not a doll! Look again!" she said pulling him to the box again. "If it's not a doll, what is it? A human?" he said rolling his eyes. "Yes, she is a human." Devon looked down at the box to see the doll leaning over the lip glaring at him.
"It talked." he looked at his mom.
"Yea, and I have a whole bunch more to sa-" Ben pushed her back in the box and closed the lid. He could hear her muffled yells from inside. "Now Devon, this isn't any ordinary pet, we both know how hard it is to obtain a human, since we live far far away from each other. Ben wants to see you to finish up a registration." she said picking up the box carefully and carrying it to his room.
Devon sighed and followed his uncle to the front room. Everyone else (his dad, brother and little sister) stayed behind.
"Ok kiddo, I asked her a few questions, , this is her information." he said handing him a couple papers. "What's Grand Mal?"
"On her planet, its a....sickness of a sort, a seziure." he explained. He looked at the picture they took of her and read the rest of the information. "Kate? That's it?"
"Do you want to change her name?" Devon shrugged and set the info. next to him. "Ok, let's see-"
"Bennie! Come here quick!" Ben quickly stood up and rushed up to Devon's room. ----------
Kate was lifted out of the box and set on a table. "Hi sweetie!" Kate looked up only to see the woman smiling down at her. "Uh...hi?"
"What happened to the dress I picked out?" she asked examining her. "I don't like dresses." Kate plainly stated. "Aw but would look so cute. You look adorable right now!"
"Look lady I don't-" the familiar buzzing sound reached her ear. Her muscles started to tense. "Oh god no...." her eyes widened in fear. "Hm? What's the matter?" the woman asked looking at her. Kate tried to talk but nothing came out. 'Damn seziures.' she thought trying to get on her knees. Everything started going black. "Bennie! Come quick!" was the last thing she heard before she fell forward.
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Devon followed close behind his uncle. The came into his bedroom only to see his mother hunched over the bed. "I-I don't know whats wrong! She was fine one minute, but the next, s-she looked like she was in pain and she collasped!"
Devon looked past them to see the human twitching violently, a line of drool going down her face. "She's having a seziure." Ben said slipping a hand under her and setting her up. The violent twitching didn't stop and she began to cough up saliva.
Ben moved in his way blocking his view from her.
(16 minutes later)
"Is she going to be ok?" asked his mother.
"Yeah, but when she wakes up, she's not going to remember anything at all, not her name, not who she is, and not who we are. I was talking to her in the car, and she told me how her brother would say she was the same old Daisy after she had a seziure, only for a hour or so, then her memory comes back. Your going to see her at her most weakest point. Be ready for water works."
"Wait, I thought you said her name was Kate." Devon stated. "Her orginal name is Daisy, but she changed it a while back."
"What else did she tell you?" asked his mother. "Not much more, just were she's from, her background story."
"Oh, could you tell us?"
Before Ben could say anything Kate moaned and began to stir.
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Post by natalie on Jun 29, 2009 14:46:32 GMT -5
Really good double updates!!
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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 29, 2009 16:18:28 GMT -5
I love it!! Continue, please!!
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