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Post by natalie on May 28, 2009 22:04:45 GMT -5
Whoa, instense scene. I wonder were she will end up? exciting chapter!! I can hardly wait to read what happens next!!
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Post by Amayasama on May 29, 2009 18:21:16 GMT -5
O.O Oh dear...I can't tell if she's in trouble or not XD; Good update! ^^
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Post by Ronnie on May 29, 2009 18:49:52 GMT -5
Ooo...This is very different...and interesting! I LIKE IT!!
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Post by LightHeart on May 29, 2009 19:46:04 GMT -5
So weird...I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!
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Post by natalie on Jun 6, 2009 1:23:06 GMT -5
i hope you continue this story ;D ;D its really really good!!
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Post by cartoonkitty22 on Jun 11, 2009 22:50:32 GMT -5
Sorry it took so long peeps, but here is a short update finally “AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!” Viva continued to tumble through the vortex, becoming more and more disoriented. Which way was up? Which was down? Hell she didn’t even know if she was coming or going at this point. “Stop the ride, stop it now! SOMEONE GET ME OFF THIS CRAZY THINGGGGG!!!” Viva screamed at the top of her lungs as the vortex continued to pull her though. Her hair was whipped around madly by the force of the wind and Viva could feel tears racing from her eyes. Suddenly, the blue light around her intensified to a blinding white and very thing stopped. Viva just floated in a void of nothingness blinking rapidly. “When I said stop the ride, this is not what I had quite in mind…” Viva muttered to herself. As quickly as the white light had appeared, it dissolved all around Viva leaving her in a now pitch black cavern. Unluckily it also left her floating in the air, which too didn’t last long. Ahhhh….OAF!!! Viva face planted into the cold, damp ground. Mumbling to herself, Viva spat out the dirt in her mouth and wiped the muck from her face. Slowly, she tired to rise to her shaky legs only to fall again. Cursing under her breath, Viva lay there with her eyes closed trying to stop the world spinning around her. Everything was so quite here, the only sounds that Viva could make out where the drips of water echoing throughout the cavern. The cool, damp air felt nice on her sore throat after all of her screaming. But then another sound became clearer as Viva focused on it. She had heard this sound very recently, but at the moment it was eluding her as to where. Opening her eyes slowly, Viva lifted herself off of the ground and leaned against the cold rock wall. She began to look around her to try and make some sense as to what happened to her. Viva was still in a cave all right, but NOT the same cave that she had been in before. Besides it being much colder here, which she was very grateful for at the moment, it was also much more damp. The walls where also much coarser too, almost jagged to the touch. And there was very little light for Viva to use, the only source coming from the cave mouth down a ways from her. Taking a few unsteady steps, Viva began to head towards the entrance of the cavern. It was slow going do to the amount of debris that litter the floor of the cavern, most of which was unidentifiable to Viva. All that she could tell was that it had all been here for a very long time. As she got closer the end of the rocky tunnel, the sound that Viva had been hearing was becoming louder. Suddenly, Viva realized what this sound was and where she had heard it before. It was a person singing, but the part that got Viva moving more quickly was the fact that this singing is exactly what she had heard before all of this madness had begun. “Now to get some answers, and they better be GOOD answers for the sake of whom ever is singing right now!” Viva growled through her teeth.
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Post by masquerade on Jun 12, 2009 3:27:35 GMT -5
The song im listening to right now matches the part with the glowing flute so much!!
btw great story
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Post by natalie on Jun 12, 2009 15:27:00 GMT -5
Really great update!! Kind of reminds me of Alice in Wonderland!! I like the vivid details!!
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 12, 2009 16:40:14 GMT -5
O.O Ohhhh *leans forward* x3 I can't wait until we meet the giant! *flails*
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Post by cartoonkitty22 on Jun 12, 2009 20:06:45 GMT -5
Thank you all for your kind words I was very uneasy about posting my ideas anywhere cause I was afraid that people would think that I was strange or that my ideas stunk. And I also love everyone's stories here too. I might not always post a replay, but I am always on waiting for the next great story to update I hope to have more to post later on tonight. I Just wanted to take the time to THANK EVERYONE here!!!
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Post by natalie on Jun 12, 2009 21:32:07 GMT -5
O.O Ohhhh *leans forward* x3 I can't wait until we meet the giant! *flails* I totally agree!! ;D
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Post by cartoonkitty22 on Jun 13, 2009 21:39:05 GMT -5
Here be more peeps!
As Viva got closer to the entrance, the voice still continued to increase in volume. It was strange to Viva to think that anyone could possibly have a voice this strong. It also became apparent too that Viva couldn’t understand the words to this mystery song. It was so beautiful yet it felt so sad and lonely. It made Viva’s heart ache just hearing it. But it soon stopped leaving Viva to the silence around her. Upon reaching the cave opening, Viva stopped.
“Maybe this isn’t the best plan of action I should be taking…” Viva breathed under she breath remembering her brilliant plan earlier with the vortex.
Thinking for a second, Viva looked around her while trying to come up with any other possibly smarter ideas for this situation. Finally she uncrossed her arms and started to carefully slink her way to the opening.
“I’ll first take a peek out there to see if this looks dangerous at all instead of storming out there blindly.” Viva stated to herself as she got ever closer to the opening.
Finally, she was at the mouth of the cave and here she pinned herself up against the stonewall. Her breathing had become more rapid and her palms where drenched in sweat. Attempting to calm her breathing, Viva took several deep breaths. Turning to look at the opening again, Viva couldn’t help but notice that it looked more like a crack in a wall than a cave opening.
“Well I sure as heck am not going to learn anything standing here like a scared stupid child.”
Slowly peeping her head out of the opening, Viva began to survey the outside. The only problem was that it WASN’T outside at all. As Viva looked, she couldn’t help but gasp in surprise at what she was seeing. This had to be the biggest room that she had ever been in before in her life. The ceiling was hundreds of feet above her at least and the length across to the opposite wall was mind-boggling. There were no furnishings to be seen and it was extremely filthy. There were large piles of what looked like hay scattered about and Viva noticed that on the walls hung menacing looking chains with shackles on the ends. Toward the middle of the furthest wall was a humongous stone staircase that lead up to a towering wooden door with metal bars on a small window. Gulping to herself, Viva continued to scan the room that she now deemed to be some kind of over sized dungeon.
Viva continued to examine as much detail as possible in the dimly lit cell from the cave, that she now knew to be a crack in the wall, when her gaze fell upon an extremely large mass near one of the corners of the room. There was so little light that it was very difficult to make out what was over there. All Viva could make out at this point was that it was something VERY BIG. Taking a very quick look around again to make sure it was safe, Viva took a shaky step out of the wall crack.
Hugging the wall as she creep along, Viva never let her gaze fall from the mass before her. Her mind kept screaming at her to go back, but her curiosity kept telling her to continue on. As she got closer, she couldn’t believe how BIG this thing was. It was like a small mountain to her. Closer and closer she crept on. Sweat was beading on her forehead and her mouth was dry. Viva was about within a stones throw away from the mass before her now and here she froze. Her body refused to go any further now matter how much she tried to reassure herself that it was ok to continue on.
“Ok, nothing to worry about girl. It’s probably just a very big boulder or maybe a-a-a…” Viva whispered to herself, when she heard the distinct sound of metal scraping against the stone floor. Her eyes shot wide open and her breathing became rapid. Staring up at the massive form before her, Viva’s body began to shake violently. A scream was wedge deep in throat as she continued to stare at what was happening before her very eyes, trying desperately to make since at what she was seeing. For the mass before her had begun to move. And not just move, it was STRECHING out its limbs!
“No w-w-way, this i-i-s not h-happening…” Viva stuttered as she slowly began to back away slowly. For now the mystery mass before her had a very distinct shape to it, a very familiar form. What was before her now was without a doubt in her mind a human shaped creature the size of building.
“Oh G-God, Why ME!”
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Post by natalie on Jun 13, 2009 22:13:27 GMT -5
Great vivid details, it reads like a movie, I like the smooth flow of the story!! Super update!! I like it!!
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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 14, 2009 0:58:34 GMT -5
WoW!!!!! MORE PLEASE!!!
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 14, 2009 13:34:15 GMT -5
O.O Oh my? Has she gone to a prison? x3 Ohhh I can't wait for more!
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Post by Ronnie on Jun 14, 2009 14:07:17 GMT -5
OOOOOoooOo...This is getting exciting :3
I can't wait for more....but, take your time dear...Art [which includes writing] takes time ^_^
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Post by Satal on Jun 24, 2009 9:11:01 GMT -5
I LOVE the use of detail! I LOVE the plot! And I cannot wait for more!
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Post by cartoonkitty22 on Jun 26, 2009 21:20:04 GMT -5
Well here is a little bit more peeps, let me know if ya all like it Viva continued to tremble at the sight before her, still unable to fully grasp what it was that she was seeing. Slowly she edged back to the crack from which she came, trying desperately to become one with the wall. Her eyes never once left the creature before her as she prayed that it would just disappear into the nothingness. But, alas, it did no such thing. The Being before her continued to stretch out different parts of its body. Viva could hear the sounds of the bones and sinew crack echoing through the room, making her cringe. But there was another sound that soon made itself clear to Viva as she tried to will herself to become just another shadow. The sound of metal clanking and scraping against itself. Blinking rapidly in confusion Viva stopped a bit short of the crack and focused her eyes in the dim lighting at the creature before her. It was then that Viva figured out what the metallic scraping noise was coming from chains attached to the creature’s limbs. Viva followed the chain’s paths as they snaked from the arms and legs to where they were embedded in the stonewall behind the creature. Viva raised her hands to her mouth and gasped silently, “What the Hell is going on here.” Viva’s heart leaped in her chest as the Being before moaned weakly and hung its head limply to the side. What ever this thing was, Viva realized, it was obvious now that it was in a great deal of pain. Biting her lower lip nervously, Viva found herself debating if she should approach once more and see if this monstrous Being was alright, or if she should run away. “This “Thing” is probably locked up here for a VERY good reason Viva. Y-you should just leave “It” be…” was her first thought before the monstrous creature let out another heart wrenching moan that seemed to echo within her body. “But “It” is clearly it a great amount of pain Viva,” she countered her pervious thought. Her heart beginning to win out over her common sense and Viva was about to approach once more when she heard the distant sounds of footsteps. They were faint at first, almost unnoticeable. But it quickly became louder with every second as whomever or whatever it was, was getting closer. And whatever it was, it was clearly BIG.
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Post by natalie on Jun 26, 2009 21:29:22 GMT -5
Whoa, intesne chapter, I hope she is going to help him. Very good descriptive details, I like the nail biting cliffhanger!! This is awesome!! I can hardly wait for the 1st meeting!!! Please continue when you have time!!
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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 27, 2009 0:43:54 GMT -5
AAAAAAAAAH! I HATE THE SUSPENSE!!
T^T!! Continue soon please!
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