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Post by Satal on Jun 27, 2009 15:35:59 GMT -5
Now I know why cliffhangers are evil. xD You have me on the edge of my seat.
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 27, 2009 17:01:39 GMT -5
xD I agree with Amy...I can't wait for more!
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Post by natalie on Jun 27, 2009 19:34:32 GMT -5
xD I agree with Amy...I can't wait for more! Yes, I agree with Amayasama and Satal.
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Post by cartoonkitty22 on Jul 6, 2009 18:33:25 GMT -5
Thank you all for your kind comments *blushes* Here is some more, but I have to warn you that things will start to be a bit more PG13 due to violence and language.
Panicking, Viva quick dove back into her mouse hole like sanctuary. Trembling like a leaf she watched the distant door with unblinking eyes, waiting for what was approaching. The footsteps became deafening tremors as they continued to get closer and now Viva could make out voices conversing with each other. Viva bit her lower lip as she lamented to herself, “Oh this is even better than being trapped in a GIANT dungeon with a GIANT something. Now, I have TWO GIANT somethings heading this way!!!”
Soon the footsteps stopped and to Viva’s despair, had stopped on the other side of the wooden door. She could make out a flickering yellow light dancing under the doorframe. The sounds of clanking metal rose up in the silence, indicating that someone was shuffling through a large set of keys. Booming, evil laughter ripped through the air, causing Viva to cover her ears from the shear volume.
Terror was taking a firm hold on her mind now making it almost impossible to think clearly. Viva’s breathing became more labored as she attempted to keep hold of what little sanity she still had. The ominous sound of the lock turning reached her ears and she stared at the door with her breath held. The door began to creak open, it’s hinges moaning from the years of neglect.
If her eyes could have gotten any bigger than they already were, the sight before her would have been all that it would for took. Viva’s mouth hung open, her lip quivering in pure fear. Tears trickled down her rosy cheeks as she stared straight ahead. For at the top of the stairs stood two monstrously huge creatures. They where definitely humanoid in their shape with two legs, two arms and one head. But, they had tails and not cute kitty cat or puppy dog tails either. No, they were reptilian tails so long that they slithered behind them like snakes as they descended the stairs. Their bodies were covered in reptilian scales that reflected the yellow light from their torch like thousands of tiny polished stones. Viva had to guess that these two creatures were males due to the broadness of their shoulders and the shape of their bodies.
The first to enter the room was fairly short in comparison to the second and much more hefty in his weight. It was actually quite comical to watch the shorter one waddle down the stairs. But, his face quickly sent shivers down Viva’s spine just by looking at it. It was contorted into a horrible sneer by a painful looking scar that went all the way up and into his eye. The eye was completely milky white indicating that the beast was blind in it’s right eye, but to Viva it still looked as if it did still work as it moved lazily in the socket. From what little elimination that came from the torch carried by the taller of the two gave, Viva had to guess that this being’s skin was rusty red in color and what little hair it did have on its head was gray. The more slim built of the two had a more brownish coloration to his body while he had greasy black hair that looked as if it had never been washed in his life. The most unsettling thing to Viva about these two creatures though was the expressions on their faces. The look of maniacal insanity and sick pleasure was enough to tell Viva that something was very wrong with these two mentally.
Upon reaching the bottom of the stairs, the two stopped and snickered to themselves as they looked over to being chained to the wall. Slowly the shorter one waddled over to the prisoner and he squatted down be eye level. With a evil chuckle the fat being raised his hand and smack the unconscious prisoner hard across the face, the resonating sound causing Viva to flinch.
“Wakie, wakie sleeping beauty,” he cackled which sent his slim companion into a laughing fit. “It be time for me lord’s din din.” This comment sent another round of patronizing laughter from the two beasts, the volume of which making Viva’s ears ring.
The prisoner jolted awake from the unexpected smack and glared daggers at the two men. Recovering from the hit rather quickly in Viva’s opinion the prisoner gave a wary smile as he looked at the fat man and stated sarcastically, “Well Hegard, isn’t it a pleasant surprise to see you again. So tell me did your wife beat you again or did you just sleep on your face the wrong way again.”
The smile on the fat man’s face, Hegard Viva noted, slowly faded into a scowl. The taller man began to snicker to himself at the witty comment, which caused Hegard to turn around sharply to glare at his companion. “Will ye shut the friggin hell up Ferrgin!”
Ferrgin quickly silenced himself and stood at attention. With a growl of annoyance, Hegard turned back to the prisoner who Viva noted had a smirk of pure satiation on his face from the reaction he had gotten out of the two men.
“So ye think ye be funny, Cojin me boy?” Hegard questioned sinisterly while he raised one of his shaggy eyebrows. “Well me boy, I be having a joke for ye too…” with which he raised his fist back and quickly rammed it into Cojin’s stomach.
The prisoner known of Cojin curled over on himself coughing up a small amount of crimson blood. Seeing their prisoner withering in pain sent the maniacal pair into a round of roaring laughter, which echoed horribly upon the cold stonewalls.
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Post by giantblackcat on Jul 6, 2009 18:42:55 GMT -5
^w^!!!!!
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Post by natalie on Jul 6, 2009 18:45:37 GMT -5
WOW, intense, great details and descriptions, like the drama, and description of what Viva is going through. I like it!! Really awesome!! Please write more, when you have time!! Double thumbs up!!
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Post by Satal on Jul 7, 2009 8:44:14 GMT -5
*le gasp* What is going to happen!? Fight back man! Give those lizard boys the chair! Er... chain?
Sorry, lack of sleep and coffee has me hyper. Still lovin' it!
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Post by Amayasama on Jul 7, 2009 19:43:49 GMT -5
^0^ Ohhh sweet can't wait to see what happens~
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Post by natalie on Jul 29, 2009 23:28:09 GMT -5
This is a really really good story, I hope you continue it!! :>
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Post by giantblackcat on Jul 30, 2009 0:32:09 GMT -5
Continue it T^T!!
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Post by natalie on Aug 12, 2009 23:57:57 GMT -5
This is a really good story, Please continue!!
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Post by natalie on Aug 24, 2009 2:09:44 GMT -5
This is an awesome story!!
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Post by Neon on Aug 25, 2009 18:14:09 GMT -5
(Just discovered this one.)
Oh dear! I hope this Cojin person will be alright. Sounds like he's been in that state for a while, though. I don't suppose Viva will have to help him out somehow, hmm?
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Post by natalie on Sept 10, 2009 0:09:22 GMT -5
(Just discovered this one.) Oh dear! I hope this Cojin person will be alright. Sounds like he's been in that state for a while, though. I don't suppose Viva will have to help him out somehow, hmm? I hope she does, too!! :> I think this would be a good T.V Mini series !!
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Post by cartoonkitty22 on Sept 26, 2009 1:14:57 GMT -5
Sorry its been so long, but i have had a number of issues come up in my life sadly But things are better now so here is an update finally. And thank you all so much for all of your wonderful comments This really helps keep me going !!! _______________________________________________________________________________________________ Viva quickly clamped her hands firmly over her mouth to muffle the scream threatened to escape from her throat. This was just too horrible to bear, even if this Cojin person had done something horrible to be locked up here. This was just too cruel in her opinion. The two jailors soon gained control of themselves and with tears of joy slightly wetting the corners of their eyes turned back to their victim. Hegard placed his hands on his hips and puffed up his chest over his “victory” over the helpless Cojin. With that same horrible sneer plastered on his deformed face he turned his head to look over his shoulder at Ferrgin. With amusement in his voice, Viva noted with disgust, Hegard called to Ferrgin. “Ferrgin! Ye go an’ lite that thar torch now! We wouldn’t want me lord to eat in de dark now would we?” Ferrgin obediently turned around walked to the nearest wall and using his torch, he lit one that was mounted onto the dungeon wall. The room immediately lit up with the yellowish light of the flame dancing to life on the torch. Viva had to shield her eyes from the sudden blast of light and it took her a good minute or two to blink away the spots that it had caused her eyes. Finally regaining her sight, Viva looked back out at the scene before her. She noticed that Hegard had poured a disgusting greenish-grey slim from a bucket onto a small metallic looking bowl. The beast of a man then kicked the bowl toward their prisoner and he turned to climb the stairs with Ferrgin following behind like a lost puppy. At the top of the stairs, Hegard turned around and stared down at Cojin how was hunched over still from the attack. With a dark chuckle he yelled down, “ Well it was a pleasure me’ lord.” He then burst into another round of laughter with Ferrgin, as they existed the room. The cell door slammed shut and the sound of the maniacal duo walking away echoed down the hall. Viva let out a breath of air that she had not notice that she had been holding. Never in her life was she so glad to see someone leave. Slowly she inched out a bit from her sanctuary so that she could get a better look at this Cojin person. Now that there was light in the room it was now possible for Viva to see him. But what she saw tore at her heart horribly. Cojin was in a very sad state. His blue scaly skin was littered with many poorly healed injuries and his weight must have been dangerously low from the way his skeleton was so easily visible. He wore nothing but brown rags that matched the dirt that covered his body and his lime green hair hung in disgusting greasy strings that hid his face from view. Viva heard him sigh as he reached out to the bowl in front of him. But the bowl was just out of his reach. She watched him scrap weakly at the floor as he tried to grasp the rim of his food bowl as he strained against the chains that held him firmly to the cold wall, her heart growing heavier with every failed attempt Cojin made. With a defeated sigh, Cojin leaned back against the wall and lifted his head to stare at he ceiling above him. The stringy hair fell away to reveal what even in his current state, he still had a very handsome face. His chin was just slightly squared and this complement well with the slopping angle of his nose to give him a very regal look. But sadly his eyes remained hidden to Viva’s viewpoint. Another sigh escape his lips as he looked once more to the food that was so cruelly placed just out of his reach. With a look of defeat, the creature before Viva pulled his knees up to his chest and buried his face into his folded arms. Viva felt nothing but sadness as she watched his man before her. He was so utterly helpless and alone, not unlike herself. Even if this Cojin had done an unspeakable crime, this was completely uncalled for in her opinion. This was torture, pure and simple. All thoughts of finding the mystery singing and getting back to where she had started where far from Viva’s mind as she continued to watch Cojin from her hiding place. An overwhelming feeling of guilt was eating away at Viva’s heart, a feeling that yelled at her to come to his aid. But her body was still frozen in fear, fear that told her that this was a very dangerous place to be. She continued to watch at a safe distance, until she realized that Cojin’s breathing had slowed and evened out. He had fallen asleep. Viva continued to gaze at him, the guilt becoming unbearable. Looking around herself, her gaze locked onto the bowl of food. An idea began to bloom in her mind, one that would satisfy both her heart and her mind of their worries. Looking back quickly to make sure that Cojin was still sleeping, Viva turned and slowly began to creep toward the food.
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Post by natalie on Sept 26, 2009 1:26:23 GMT -5
Glad things are going better for you!! (Big Hug) Yaahoo!! A great update!! Yayyy, She is going to help him, Like all the deep writing and descriptive details!!
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Post by giantblackcat on Sept 26, 2009 14:37:20 GMT -5
OwO!! Continue soon! >w<!
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Post by Satal on Sept 26, 2009 15:23:05 GMT -5
This update was worth the wait! Glad things are going good for you! ^^
But the cliffhanger! Dx
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Post by Neon on Sept 26, 2009 18:59:58 GMT -5
Glad to hear you are doing better. =D
Jeez ... poor guy. D: Cojin's not doing too well.
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Post by Amayasama on Sept 27, 2009 10:57:11 GMT -5
^^ Oh I'm happy you can still continue this story, I wanted to see what happened with the giant! <3
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