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Post by natalie on May 31, 2009 23:03:37 GMT -5
Very good job!! I like the shading.
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Post by MoonStarNinja4 on Jun 4, 2009 18:47:44 GMT -5
Aww... I was enjoying this story. I hope you continue it. ^_^
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Post by natalie on Jun 5, 2009 13:48:01 GMT -5
hope you continue it also
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Post by cutiedani21 on Jun 5, 2009 21:22:05 GMT -5
Oh I am continuing it!
sorry guys!
its just i've been busy with finals ... and let me dare say the word.... REGENTS *Le Gasp*
but once I've finished I'll have more time to work on my story!
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Post by MoonStarNinja4 on Jun 6, 2009 10:18:56 GMT -5
Oh I am continuing it! sorry guys! its just i've been busy with finals ... and let me dare say the word.... REGENTS *Le Gasp* but once I've finished I'll have more time to work on my story! I was kind of wondering if that was it because my finals were also this week. ^_^
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Post by cutiedani21 on Jun 6, 2009 22:30:55 GMT -5
(And yes I’ve decided to continue writing^^)
So Voila:
Chapter 10
Coils of Death
“YES SHES MY SISTER! Now if we hurry up we still might be able to find her!” Jayden yelled.
Taren was still in shock. He blinked for a moment then returned to his senses,” Oh yea right. We have to find her!”
“But how will we see her in the dark, we don’t want to step on her,” Jayden mumbled.
Taren held his hands out in front of him until above both of them were two small flames, burning vigorously. Taren smiled, “Now we can see.”
“Right let’s go!” Jayden said as the two quickly, yet carefully, ran into the night.
Alina had not stopped running since she Jayden’s foot had slammed next to her. She had heard him yelling, however did not make out what he said. But it didn’t matter; she didn’t want to be near him either way.
She was now a good distance from the house, and without its light, she couldn’t see in the darkness. She gulped as she remembered the size of the meat Taren had cooked earlier. To think that there were creature that big out here, or even larger ones, made her shiver. Suddenly Alina crashed into something.
“Owwwww,” she moaned clutching her nose, as a warm, thick liquid began to ooze out.
“Great now my nose is bleeding,” Alina mumbled feeling what she had bumped into, a tree. She slowly sat down and leaned against it, tilting her head back to prevent her nose from dripping blood. She coughed,” Hopefully those clowns won’t find me.”
Suddenly, there was small thudding on the ground. “Great Tarens coming,” Alina said rolling her eyes. She slowly got up, feeling the tree; she made her way behind it and curled in a ball. Hopefully they would be too dumb to look behind a tree. She just had to keep her mouth shut.
The area was suddenly lit by a faint glow, they were coming closer. With the small light, Alina could see her surroundings. In front of her appeared to be an ‘endless’ forest. Probably a great distance from her small cottage.
She flinched, hearing a small rustle in the tree in front of her. She watched as what looked like a giant snake, slithered its way down the bark of the neighboring tree.
Alina swallowed hard,” Ma-Maybe it wa-won’t see me.” She crossed her fingers, as she stared down the snake. She shivered as she watched it slither its tongue quickly. She never understood why snakes always did that tongue thing. Then she heard a crashing footstep. They were within feet from her.
“See her anywhere?” She heard Taren ask.
“No,” Jayden replied. Alina had froze when she heard Jayden’s voice. Why had he come? She sure what she feared more: him or the snake. The snake, which was now much closer to her slithered its tongue yet again. Alina looked deeply at the Snake, and it appeared to stare back at her. But she refused to believe it had seen her, she wanted to believe it would just slither away.
“I can’t find her anywhere!” Jayden cried in frustration.
Taren groaned,” I’m not sure if were even ever going to find her-“Suddenly, a bloodcurdling scream filled the air.
“Alina!” they both yelled dashing toward the scream.
When Taren spotted Alina his face turned to stone. He had found her, but, she was about to be eaten by a snake. She was trapped in its grasp, with it tightly coiled around her. Her face beginning to turn white as it squeezed the life out of her.
Taren took action.
He grabbed the coils of the snake, squeezing them all his might. The snake hissed as its skin began to sizzle and burn to a crisp. Taren burned right through its skin until the snake had seized its hissing, and died.
“Alina,” he gasped. Her face looked pale and lifeless as she lay in the coils of the snake. It was dead, and thus its death grip was released. Taren shrunk down to ‘human size’ and walked over the remains of the snake, quickly moving towards Alina.
“Alina,” he coughed,” Please be okay.” He lifted her from the coils of the snake, and held her in his lap. He put his head against her chest.
Silence. There was not a single beat.
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Post by natalie on Jun 6, 2009 23:22:00 GMT -5
WOW!!! intense, scary scene. I am glad that they found her. Awesome update!! I like it !!
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Post by MoonStarNinja4 on Jun 7, 2009 10:17:38 GMT -5
Whoa... Awesome update!
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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 7, 2009 11:21:36 GMT -5
^^!!!
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 7, 2009 12:33:38 GMT -5
o.o Oh no....D: But she can't be dead!
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Post by boo on Jun 7, 2009 19:01:44 GMT -5
CPR TAREN CPR!!!! DX BUT DON'T LET JAYDEN SEE! HE MIGHT GET THE WRONG IDEA! Good job Dan Chan! But I would use the word 'flick' instead for slither for the snakes tongue movement Keep up the awesomeness!
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Post by Ronnie on Jun 9, 2009 11:32:03 GMT -5
D:> Oh Noes!!! *le gaspeth*
Is she dead? I must know!! But..to be honest...I doubt she's dead...I mean...there'd be no story if she' s dead, now would there? ;P
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Post by cutiedani21 on Jun 9, 2009 17:24:38 GMT -5
Ronnie: Smartypants don't kill the cliffhanger! XP
Boo: Oh thanks for the grammer point! I'll fix that... eventually when i feel like it XP And Cpr was actually what i was thinking ....
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Post by Ronnie on Jun 10, 2009 12:42:24 GMT -5
Yay! I'm SMRAT!! ;P
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Post by Deleted on Jun 10, 2009 17:56:46 GMT -5
OH MY GOOD GOLLY GOSH!! I looooove this storyyyy~!
Thanks for telling me about this site, Dani ^0^ If I didn't know about it, I would've missed your fabulous story!! <3
I can't wait to see what's next!! PWEASE DON'T DIE ALINAAAA! LIIIIIIIVE!!
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Post by cutiedani21 on Jun 26, 2009 16:29:31 GMT -5
Oh np Chibi ;D ;D
sry guys im taking so long but I'm writing it right now actually. Sorry skool just ended today! D:
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Post by cutiedani21 on Jun 26, 2009 17:26:35 GMT -5
Chapter 11
Taren thought fast and began to pump up and down above her heart.
“God Alina get up! Please,” Taren moaned.
Just as he was about to breath air into her mouth, Taren was pushed suddenly.
“Move!” Jayden yelled shoving him out of the way. Taren watched in awe as Jayden began to pump furiously up and down on her chest. Then as Jayden breathed into her mouth, and pumped one last time, Alina sat up with a jolt and began coughing. As she looked up to thank Taren for saving her, her eyes locked.
It was not Taren who had saved her, it was Jayden.
“Wha-why did you help me?’ Alina asked confused.
“What? I can’t just get a thank you?” Jayden said toying a finger in her face.
“Uhm t-thanks,” Alina said with a small confused smile.
Standing up, Jayden extended his hand and helped to help her up. It was then she realized she was standing on the snake that had just tried to eat her.
Alina screamed, “The Sna-““Relax its dead,” Taren broke in.
“Oh, it is dead,” she smiled,” By the way thanks you guys, for- for saving me,” Alina said fumbling her fingers, and looking guiltily at the ground.
Jayden’s expression changed, “Next time listen to Taren. It’s dangerous out there.” Why did he care so much? Why had his feeling toward her changed so rapidly? These questions flashed through her mind.
“Don’t ever do that again,” Jayden said looking down at her, his eyes locked on hers. Alina only nodded in agreement. Why was he commanding her? Why did he care at all? There had to be a reason, there just had to be.
Then Jayden’s eyes met Taren’s. They both nodded and slowly stepped away.
“Don’t move,” Taren mumbled. When they were a good distance away, Alina watched as they both grew to their giant height. Alina stared in fright as Jayden’s huge hand reached toward her. She squeaked and curdled into a ball.
“Relax,” Jayden said with a sigh,” I’m not going to hurt you.” What if he really did care? Maybe he really wasn’t going to hurt her after all, she thought doubtfully.
“Maybe I shouldn’t have been so mean to her,” Jayden cursed through his teeth,” Now she’s afraid of me. ”
She slowly uncurled from her ball as she began to trust him ever so little. “What did you say?” she asked quietly.
“It doesn’t matter. Now please just let me pick you up so we can go back inside. I’m not going to hurt you,” Jayden pleaded. It broke Taren’s heart to see how frightened and confused Alina looked. Just as she was about to agree to let Jayden take her back, Taren broke in,” You know Jayden, just let me take her back.”
“But-“Jayden began.
Taren put a hand on his friend’s shoulder,” It’s easier for now.” Jayden nodded in agreement,” Fine.”
Taren slowly bent down, and reached toward Alina. With two fingers he carefully lifted her off the ground by the back of her dress. She gasped, but then relaxed. He dropped her onto his waiting palm where she sat down, and clung to his thumb.
“Alina,” he said looking into her eyes,” Please don’t ever do that to me again.” Alina stared back into his eyes; they looked worried yet serious at the same time. Then she couldn’t help herself, and began to cry.
“Shhhh, it’s okay,” Taren said trying to calm her,” It’s over. See the snakes dead.” He began to rub his finger on her back,” It’s okay Alina. I’m here, I’ll protect you.” Slowly her tears died and she stared up at him again. He smiled,” See your fine.” Alina managed to smile back ever so slightly,” I’ll protect you, I promise.”
(And here’s a surprise… Since I’ve made you guys wait so long…. Here’s a double update! )
Chapter 12
“Let’s go,” Jayden mumbled. It was silent as they slowly walked back together. Taren glanced often at his hand to make sure Alina was okay or frightened. By the time they had made it back to the house, Taren discovered Alina had fallen asleep on his palm. He sighed; this was too much for her. She needed to get a good rest. He gently placed her onto his pillow, and walked into the closet. He took off his shirt, and put on a pair of warm pants.
As he stepped out of the closet he was surprised to see Jayden kneeling over his bed staring deeply at Alina.
“Please don’t wake her,” Taren said quietly.
“I won’t,” Jayden replied.
“Why didn’t you tell me you had a sister?” Taren asked curiously.
“Because it was none of your business,” Jayden replied in a nasty tone.
“How come you never saw her before? She doesn’t even know you’re her brother,” Taren continued.
“You ask too many questions,” Jayden sighed,” Go away.” Then he walked over to his bed and laid on it, closing his eyes.
“I know your not sleeping Jay, and I will find out the answers to those questions,” Taren replied.
“Ugh shut up,” Jayden said before rolling onto his side, and facing away from Taren," Your annoying."
Taren slowly lifted Alina off the bed so he could get on, then placed her on his chest. He then covered a hand over her to keep her warm.
“Goodnight Alina, “he whispered before turning out the light.
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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 26, 2009 17:37:33 GMT -5
Aww!!! ;D!!!
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Post by natalie on Jun 26, 2009 21:13:55 GMT -5
Yahoo!! a double update!! Sweet cliffhanger, A lot of mysterious questions, I like it.!! Very interesting story!! I can hardly wait to read what happens next!!!
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Post by cutiedani21 on Jun 27, 2009 23:23:09 GMT -5
Chapter 13 ;D ;D ( hope u guys like it )
Alina awoke but she did not want to open her eyes. Were yesterday’s events a dream? Or was she really stuck in Giant territory? She was tempted not to open her eyes and find out, for fear of discovering that it was indeed not a dream. It was then she realized whatever she was lying on was warm, and somewhat smooth. She opened her eyes when she finally noticed that the ground below her was slowly moving up and down, and the fact that she was pressed against it, smashed like the meat between two loafs of bread.
When she looked around, Alina gasped when she realized that yesterday’s events were indeed true. And that what she was lying on was…. Taren’s chest; which explained why the ground had been moving up and down. She had to admit, he was pretty well toned. And yet he looked so vulnerable while he was sleeping. She stared for a minute at his face; he looked to helpless, even for a creature his size. Then Taren groaned, turning his head in the other direction, switching the position of his elbow as he fidgeted in his sleep, causing his hand to push heavier on Alina’s back.
Alina gasped for a second as Taren’s hand pressed harder on her back. But as she tried to pull herself out from under it, she couldn’t budge. The hand was too heavy.
“Gah Taren wake up you over grown oaf!” she yelled. He did not stir. “GET UP!” she screamed even louder.
Taren was suddenly awoken by Alina who was screaming names at him- he didn’t pay much attention to what she was saying. All that he caught was – “YOU STUPID IDIOT WAKE UP ALREADY!”
“Alright, Alright I’m up,” Taren said keeping his eyes shut.
“Then if you would please… GET YOUR HAND OFF ME,” Alina yelled. Taren opened his eyes to see Alina squashed tightly under his hand.
“Ehh, sorry,” Taren apologized quickly removing his hand,” I move when I sleep sometimes.”
“I can see that,” Alina rolled her eyes. Then in a second Alina was surrounded by darkness. Taren had carefully grabbed her and then rolled onto his side. He opened his hand and cupped her against him. She was about to scream until his hand opened up and she found herself sitting on it.
Shutting his eyes again he whispered,” Good night.”
“Hey no! Taren get up! Don’t go back to sleep!” Alina yelled.
“Hmm? What’s that sorry can’t hear you,” he yawned.
“Tarennnn…,” she called.
“Just go back to sleep, I’m tired….” Taren groaned. With not much of a choice Alina decided she’d just go back to sleep. He did help save her yesterday after all. She slowly snuggled against him and closed her eyes.
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Taren awoke to see Jayden was no longer in his bed. Where had he gone off too? As he slowly opened his hand he saw Alina was still asleep against him. She looked so cute, curled up in the corner between his hand and his chest.
He sighed and slowly rubbed her back with his finger,” Alinaaaaaa get up.”
“Okay, okay,” she said and then popping up like popcorn. Taren laughed, and then removed his hand from under her, and she plopped onto the mattress. Then he sat up, and stretched his arms over his head.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ “Haha, you have bed head,” Alina laughed pointing at him. Taren blushed slightly and attempted to fix his hair.
When Taren and Alina arrived downstairs they were both shocked. There in the kitchen was Jayden, and he was smiling, with breakfast made for everyone on the table. “Good morning,” Jayden grinned.
“Uhh, good morning too?” Taren replied confused,” Why did you make such a nice breakfast?” “Oh so a guy just can’t be nice?” Jayden asked. Alina had only known him for a day, and yet she knew something was up. What was he planning? Jayden had actually prepared a big nice breakfast, and tried to act extra friendly in order to attempt to cure Alina of her fear of him. He just couldn’t have his own younger sister afraid of him, even if she was a human.
Since he had found out they were siblings, he suddenly felt close to her. At this point he would do anything to have her no longer fear him.
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