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Post by giantblackcat on May 11, 2009 13:17:13 GMT -5
Coooooooooooooooooool!! ;D
I hope see more soon!! ^^!!
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Post by Ronnie on May 11, 2009 13:21:08 GMT -5
Thanks! I'm just putting up what I put on DA already though... the next chapter may not come for awhile >.>;...maybe within the next week....maybe... *shrugs*
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Post by giantblackcat on May 11, 2009 13:23:12 GMT -5
Ok!! !
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Post by LightHeart on May 11, 2009 14:46:30 GMT -5
I like like this story SOO much...Why is Ryan such a jerkward...
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Post by Ronnie on May 11, 2009 14:52:18 GMT -5
because...it's a secret XDDDD...that probably won't be revealed til' the sequel I'm already planning LOL
and Thank joo~
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Post by LightHeart on May 11, 2009 16:35:52 GMT -5
because...it's a secret XDDDD...that probably won't be revealed til' the sequel I'm already planning LOL and Thank joo~ Yer welkies!!! ....Ryan the Jerkwad!!
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Post by giantblackcat on May 12, 2009 2:43:15 GMT -5
;D!
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Post by giantblackcat on May 12, 2009 12:54:29 GMT -5
Moremoremoremore!!! >.<!!
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Post by Ronnie on May 12, 2009 12:56:44 GMT -5
Auuughhhh...I don't have any more....TT______TT
Hopefully I'll have more up soon... I've just been really busy with work and stuff.....
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Post by giantblackcat on May 12, 2009 13:00:05 GMT -5
Don't worry!!! ;D!!
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Post by Ronnie on May 12, 2009 13:02:52 GMT -5
:DDDDD
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Post by LightHeart on May 12, 2009 15:11:50 GMT -5
Oooo...Ryan's go a soft spot. *giggles and yells to the world "Ryan luv Loraine"
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Post by Ronnie on May 12, 2009 15:14:04 GMT -5
I wouldn't say that just yet ^^;
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Post by giantblackcat on May 12, 2009 15:19:54 GMT -5
Oooo...Ryan's go a soft spot. *giggles and yells to the world "Ryan luv Loraine" *Yells with her* And is a sugar baby!! ;D
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Post by Ronnie on May 12, 2009 15:36:54 GMT -5
Sugar baby!? *laughs*
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Post by LightHeart on May 12, 2009 15:39:37 GMT -5
Oooo...Ryan's go a soft spot. *giggles and yells to the world "Ryan luv Loraine" *Yells with her* And is a sugar baby!! ;D Ryan the sugar babe! Ryan the sugar babe! XDXDXDDD
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Post by giantblackcat on May 12, 2009 15:40:21 GMT -5
8DDD!!
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Post by jaco on May 13, 2009 14:20:08 GMT -5
While Im not a Giant fan, I prefer the shrinking side, this is a story with well thought out characters, and an interesting plot. But it is screaming for more detail, on how this all works, On utopia, the interaction between it and the rest of the world. Who runs it? Why are the Giants content just to stay there and not run amok across the rest of the world. I actually read through it all three times, because I thought I was sure I had to of missed something! Again!! Great Plot! Interesting cross section of characters (Im rootin for Kai) But I would like to see "the rules" i.e... more description of how this world works between Utopia and the rest of the globe. Are all scientists at utopia giants etc.... ? It's the details that will bring this more to life.
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Post by Ronnie on May 13, 2009 14:36:28 GMT -5
Wow...Thank you...It' s nice to see a comment that's not just saying how they "love it" or whatever... I NEED a critic...obviously...my writing isn't exactly the best >.>...
You ask some wonderful questions that just need to be addressed....I just don't know the answers to them all yet...
some of them WILL be addressed later in the story though...I just didn't say the facts right away because I didn't want it to seem like I'm force-feeding info...I want it to flow like a regular story...if that makes any sense...
Believe me though...I plan on making Lorain rather inquisitive ...and most questions shall be answered...
About the lack of detail....detail is the bane of my existence...even though I love it so....it just takes me fooorrreever to right a detailed paragraph...and I'm a lazy bum...haha
but I shall work on the detail...yeah...Thanks again for the in-depth comment ^_^
I will tell you one thing though, even though it maybe called "The Utopia" ...That's hardly the case... ;-)
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Post by jaco on May 13, 2009 14:53:22 GMT -5
Sure thing. I know about story flow, but the beginning needs a bit more about the setup of utopia, you only give us the briefest of insight "Males with the gigantism problem are sent sent there" This is the area that with some expanding will give it more reality. If I were Ryan, with his attitude, I would have been out of utopia and runnin a rampage! But then, I dont have that kind of attitude Hopefully Kai knows karate or kung fu and kicks Ryan's butt later on.
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