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Post by Amayasama on Jun 9, 2009 20:14:00 GMT -5
XD Oh really? That big ol' spirit? x3 That could of been a younger him! Though he's a lot less serious XD ^^ No, no I see him as an overprotective older brother trying to help his sister You knows I like cuddley big guys! XD Look at all my work, gotta have one of those
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 9, 2009 21:09:48 GMT -5
He gets alot more serious and WAY TOO overprotective X3...Then he gets angry...and well...you'll just have to read...
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 9, 2009 23:35:37 GMT -5
Chapter 2- His rage
I prepared for my test as always...only this time...Maxie didn't leave. "I want to see what you people do to my baby." he growled menacingly. I fingered my hair; the was going to end badly. I could feel it.
The first few test were simple. Bump on the knee, checking the vitals...simple...But the next part...I loathed. They stuck small tubes into me and then muttered things like "What if she doesn't make it this time?" I was scared; I wanted to call it off,but before I could utter a word, hot burning liquid entered by body. The pain was so intense...no...Intense don't even fit in that type of pain. I screamed for then to stop as flashes of my past danced in front of me...then the pain stopped. It didn't gradually get softer like it usually did; it just stopped completely.
"Is this want you do?...Insert my blood into her body...To try and make her like me?!?!"
Maxie's voice was fulled with anger and rage. I've never seen him so mad. His eyes changes from a calm purple to a raging inferno red. His body grew and grew and grew. My fear escalated as the scientist ran in terror; he stopped about half of them and crushed them with his fist. A scream emitted from my lips as I ran from the the testing rooms. Yelling and the sound of bodies being ripped apart filled my ears.
The whole building was being torn apart. I hid among the rubble,rocking back and forth whispering," Go away. Just going away. Disappear. Fade away, like a bad dream."
The piece of wall I was hiding under lifted away. I jerked my head up to see his pale face and purple-plum eyes looking down on me. He had to be over 240 ft. now...Way over. I screamed in terror and ran as fast as my legs could carry me. The sickening scent of blood filled my nose. I just wanted it to go away! Where did my sweet brother go?! All that's here is this...this...this monster!!!!
A shadow surrounded me and I was plunged into darkness.
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Post by natalie on Jun 9, 2009 23:47:48 GMT -5
Whoa, now I see why she is scared of him!!! Awesome update, I like it!!!! I am going to read it again ;D
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 9, 2009 23:50:06 GMT -5
Thank you!....Poor Minnie...scared stiff of her bro...
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Post by natalie on Jun 9, 2009 23:53:35 GMT -5
Thank you!....Poor Minnie...scared stiff of her bro... Your Welcome!!! Yeah, I agree, Poor Minnie, I feel sorry for her.
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 10, 2009 3:01:55 GMT -5
When I re-read your story I noticed some small little things so I hoped to point this out to help. ^^
I tried to say sometime something...but my word were lodged in my throat. I just sat there with my mouth wide open like a dear deer in a pair of headlights.
I sheepishly smiled and nodded. Was in just me or had he gotten bigger. bigger?
I have yet to read the third update XD I'll do it tomorrow ^^ Hope this helps!
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 10, 2009 7:49:49 GMT -5
thank you!!...I'll make the corrections!!!
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Post by Deleted on Jun 10, 2009 8:04:58 GMT -5
^^ Great intro! Can't wait to see what comes next!!
Oh, and I'm all for the white hair and plum-colored eyes combo. :3
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 10, 2009 12:34:59 GMT -5
D: Oh Maximum be nice...*hugs his knee* XD I'm worried about his anger management, prehaps I should get my Amuyu to teach him?
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Post by Deleted on Jun 10, 2009 18:00:25 GMT -5
o.O Oh jeez... I somehow missed the last chapter.
*shivers* so violent... ;_______________;
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 10, 2009 18:08:18 GMT -5
There will be more....sorry...;__________;....Bad Maxie...
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 10, 2009 18:41:11 GMT -5
XD When she wakes up she should be like "D< Bad Maxie!!"
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 10, 2009 18:43:59 GMT -5
She would never say that...She'd run in terror...and never speak to him...
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 10, 2009 18:54:20 GMT -5
;^; Awww I wonder how she's going to handle Maxie now though. He's so big!
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Post by Deleted on Jun 10, 2009 20:02:51 GMT -5
MOAR PLZ. X3
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Post by natalie on Jun 10, 2009 23:29:33 GMT -5
Yes, more please ;D
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 11, 2009 20:12:25 GMT -5
There will be more!
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Post by natalie on Jun 11, 2009 20:55:49 GMT -5
There will be more! Yahoo!!
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 12, 2009 23:16:51 GMT -5
Chapter 2-cont.
As the darkness surrounded me, I screaming for mercy. I didn't want to die...Not like this...Not at my own brother's hand. The sensation of being lifted up hit me hard like a ton of cinder blocks. I cried and covered my head,whispering to myself,"No...no! This can't be happening! It's just a bad dream. Just a bad dream. Go away, go away!" The darkness disappeared; I looked up to see my brother face to face . His eyes were back to their normal plum color. He looked pale and worried.
"Did I hurt you,Minnie? I'm so sorry if I did!"
"Go away..."
"...What?"
"Go away! Leave me alone! You're not my brother! YOU'RE A MONSTER!!!![/b]" His eyes widened with shock and disbelief. Then a wave of sadness over came his face. He set me down and walked over to the part of the building that wasn't destroyed. I covered my eyes...and mourn for the death of my real brother.
-----6 months later------
Again, I awoke for another nightmare. I saw my brother go on a killing spree. Building after building crumbled as the people ran for their lives. Most we unfortunate as to be caught by Maxie and where crushed to death. I tried my best to stop him but as always...I was useless.
After I dressed myself, I went to the cafeteria. Maximum was there. He never said anything to me as I entered, as I to him. The people had be replaced and the testing had stopped... Maximum had not looked at me since our spat; no doubt he was still sad the I, his only known LIVING family member, called him a monster.
"Good Morning." I muttered,not taking my eyes off of Maximum. "Good morning,Minima." rumbled Maximum. His voice was filled sadness.
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