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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 14, 2009 12:31:57 GMT -5
Wow!! ^^!!!!!!
M.O.R.E!!!!!!! please!
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 14, 2009 12:34:06 GMT -5
I will supply!
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 14, 2009 14:11:37 GMT -5
It was wrong off of me to try and push you away because...you're a giant. I just wanted you to be happy and save safe. ^^ Just two that I noticed in the late post, reading the other right now! xD As for the news of the leaving thing darling I think you brought it on a little fast but otherwise twas great!  |
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Post by Ronnie on Jun 14, 2009 14:20:41 GMT -5
Good ^^...a little rushed, like Amaya said, but overall this is great stuff. I do hope you continue....
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 14, 2009 14:24:34 GMT -5
Amaya: Thanks for catching the errors...normally I don't it that much...
Ronnie: thanks! I will continue!
As for the rushed leaving part, I wanted to go ahead to the place where the story mainly takes place( and where Maxie has most of his rampages are.)
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Post by natalie on Jun 14, 2009 22:59:03 GMT -5
Great twist!! Awesome update. I like the ending line, LOL!!!!
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Post by cheesiechan on Jun 16, 2009 7:43:13 GMT -5
Hee-hee, "this woman is nuts" XD Very sweet interactions between the sibblings! As I've said, very good! There were a few grammar mistakes (sorry I'm such a Grammar Nazi XD; ), but Amaya has been a great help with that :3 You're doing wonderfully! ^^
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Post by crystalrose557 on Jun 19, 2009 19:44:33 GMT -5
I only have three questions
1. where's the city their going to?
2. Does Maximum need a girlfriend?
and 3. When and what should I pack?
and for those who read royal pet
I'm not betraying Prince Rei, I'm improvising ;D
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 19, 2009 22:24:55 GMT -5
1. Somewhere in Connecticut 2. Maybe...do you want to be in the Story? 3. ...I don't know...just be ready.  |
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Post by crystalrose557 on Jun 20, 2009 10:51:19 GMT -5
1. Woo Hoo Conneticut!
2. yes I'll be honored
and
3. "somehow managed to pack entire life in suitcase"
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 23, 2009 19:37:54 GMT -5
( It's been forever since I updated this...Don't hurt me!!))
Chapter 4-- Rougeport
I gazed at the open field as the car I was riding in pasted them by; I had to wonder was this new city was like. Dr. Macintosh told me it was called Rougeport and made several rude comments about the city not having a harbor but still having "port" in it's name. I rolled my eyes at the thought; My thoughts wandered to Maxie. I wonder if he was okay with all of this...everything was moving so fast these days. Maxie said that he would follow on foot because it wasn't a long way to him. The thought of him simply strolling to the city popped in my head...The next was him rampaging through it. I groaned and slapped my head; why did I still fear my brother? Maybe it was because I saw him man-slaughter several people. I shivered,
"Are we there yet?" I murmured, voice mixed with fear and agitation.
"Yes, we are here." said the driver. I stepped out of the car and gasped with amazement. The building glistened with a beautiful shine. Even the people had a certain glimmer to them. Everyone was so happy...That's how I wished to be...Happy.
"Hey,Newbie! Over here!" called an unfamiliar voice. I turned to see a girl who appeared around my age. She had dark brown skin and lovely black curls in pigtails.She wore short jeans and a white top that said,"Check Me..I've got nothing to hide." Her brown eye stared at my being. She looked a heck of alot like a lolita.
"Um...Hello there." I said timidly.
"Greetings, Newbie! Name's Momoko,but you can call me Momo!" I nodded. She certainly was...spirited. "Nice hair and cool contacts!" She piped.
"Um...This is all me..."
"REALLY?!?!? WHOA!! So, wanna get some pizza or something? I'll be you're new best friend!!!!"
"Well...um..."
"Great!" she said pulling me away from the car. "I'll have my people get with your people to tell they where we are!"
"But..." I gave up trying to talk with the girl...clearly she wasn't listening...
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Post by giantblackcat on Jun 23, 2009 19:42:43 GMT -5
A hiperactive girl... ^^;
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Post by natalie on Jun 23, 2009 19:48:17 GMT -5
A hiperactive girl... ^^; Yes, very!! ;D Great update! |
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 23, 2009 19:56:58 GMT -5
;D
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Post by Amayasama on Jun 24, 2009 19:16:23 GMT -5
XD Haha I think Momo needs to sleep or switch to decaf
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Post by Satal on Jun 26, 2009 8:49:38 GMT -5
Hm.... what is Maxie gunna do when he gets there and finds his sister has run off?
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 26, 2009 9:45:13 GMT -5
Minnie: I don't want to know..
But i'm putting it anyway!
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Post by crystalrose557 on Jun 26, 2009 18:49:34 GMT -5
yep that's me alright
especially after sugar ^_^'
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 27, 2009 14:07:57 GMT -5
^^ i was hoping I captured you well!!
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Post by LightHeart on Jun 27, 2009 20:07:02 GMT -5
Chap. 4 con't.
Momo dragged me to the pizzeria and began asking me random questions. None of which I got to answer.
"Momo," I pleaded, "I must go back to the center...My brother is on his way...and if I am not there then...he will be very upset." Upset wouldn't be the word for his anger...Blood-thirsty or murderous would fit...
"Aw,Don't sweat it, 'k? We'll be back before he gets here!" She said nonchalantly while biting into a slice of pizza.
I shook my head and looked at my slice of pizza. I couldn't shake The sinking feeling I had...
After lunch, Momo took me to random places like the skating rink,the flower shop and the local drug store. She made sure that everyone knew my name and that I was Momo's best friend. I received shocked and perplexed looks as well as questions as to why was my hair white and my eyes pink; one person asked me was I sick and commented that I needed to be Quarantined. Momo told the person off and continued with the tour.
"The NERVE of some people! Who comes up to a little girl and said that to her?! Ooo! If I EVER see that jerk again..." Momo seethed. I wanted to tell her that I was 59 year old woman with the mind and body of a 10 year old...but why ruin it for her?
The next place I was dragged to was the park, where it looked as if the whole city was there.
"I heard from a cousin of mine that the mayor has something BIG to show us." whispered Momo in my ear.
Big indeed, I thought.
"Ya know...I knew got to ask you...why did you move here?"
"...To get away."
"From?"
I was just about to tell her when a crash sounded off in the distance...
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